by spamwich
Nice start to a story that has the possibility to be very good. I know you'll get some commenting negatively, but it's a story, so certain things don't have to be realistic.
I'll be keeping a look out for the next chapter.
Nothing's happened yet, but it's a very good start, I like your tone and narrative flow too.
This same thing happened to me. I glad someone is willing to come out and post about it.