by Art Martin
Your characters are a little weak.. the comedy on page one was nice though .. imagine barb wire bicep tattoo and cool in the same sentence.. Nick Lachey would be proud. Other than that the story was mildly hot during page two. Again though, the characters were a turn off, either you've no self awarness or you really didn't mind that the characters were pretty fake.
As a woman and fellow author, I absolutely love it when I come across a story here with as much detail and attention as your story had. Aside from being hot as hell, I appreciated how well-written it was. I must say, I've had more than a few daydreams about being in Kara's many, many positions. Bravo!
~K
first off awesome story good buildup to an even better climax keep up good stories like this one coming
jesus christ, i dont think ive ever come so hard in my life. i nearly dropped the laptop on the floor! hottest thing i have EVER read
Well that sucked ass, I haven't found a good story on here in two days.... Sigh. At least it wasn't a shitty flat out rape story under the pathetic guise of 'Reluctance/Non-Consent' like the last one where the guy walked into the store and was raping the guys japanese daughter fresh off the boat as soon as the guy left to go get some parts. Sigh.
We need more stuff like 'just the six of us' and such. Sigh. (Crying)