All Comments on 'Promises, Promises'

You need to do some proof reading to fix some grammatical errors and to fix some errors in continuity but all that aside, it was a great story. You need to finish it. I don't think she got what she deserved. >:)

i agree with the first comment, the grammar needs some polishing....but the story itself was fantastic.

I too, agree with the first comment. But, it is still very good and well written. Would like to see more of the story, see the plot/characters worked out a little more.

The BIG dick was unexpected, and unnecessary. Probably would have been stronger if the sister was subjugated by a brother with a normal (or less) size dick. That would have made the brother's domination of her even more compelling.

But on the whole, very good.

Thanks.

Normally, when I read the story and the main character has a huge penis, I hate it. But, this time, it just feels right for some reason. It feels right that after having his sister call him half a man and saying that he was meant to be a girl twin that he just have this monster dong.

*shrugs* that's just my two cents though.

Good job building the suspense of how he was going to receive justice for his sister's terrible cruelty. Can't wait to read more! In this case the huge cock was not a case of "huge-cock-itis" but poetic justice.

...is a dish best served c-o-l-d. Ok so what I'm a trekkie. This is soooo good. Really hot and really well written.

I need more I want to know what happen.

Great story! Good revenge but not too inhuman, dunno what else to say, just great job I hope there's more, I'm about to check but if not please write more!!

... how this bitch of a sister treats her twin-brother. She had it coming all the way along. The grammar wasn't as bad as some of the former comments may say, but I'm from germany, so I could be wrong. But the story might be the greates I ever read on literotica. The scene with him daydreaming in hystery class and his sister telling sue was great in its cruelty. After about 2 minutes of reading I started hating his sister. I hoped somehow that he could get her back in the worst way ever and that he actually fucked her and still got a picture make the round in school was just the right treatment she deserved... for the beginning. Please write more! I want to see this bitch be tormented for every little second she was cruel to her brother. Keep it on , for god's sake!^^

This may be a long comment, but the story was just great and had to write what I think of it *g*

Say it ain't so YAWNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNN.

This is great work man. I am surprised this is under mind control and not under bdsm. Not complaining or anything. In fact, I liked the fact that he turned is sister into a cockaholic. And the pictures on the locker...priceless!!! You need to add Suzanne into the mix sometime....maybe her apologizing after seeing those pictures of Tyrone (sans his sister's face) porking some white trash ho.

You need to follow-up on this story and let us know how Tyrone and Suzanne end up. and does Michael get his Dream Girl and keep her and his Sister as Slaves.

waste of time and space, big dicks= turn off, piss poor writing = turn off, unrealistic story= turn off. no guy twin or not would ever want anything to do with a bitch like her, he would find a way to ignore and avoid her at all costs going as far as to move away. this isn't the twilight zone so stop with the unbelievable garbage.

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