by sbarnes
Wonder where some of these authors attended school or if they listened in class at all. This story again has one using "..." and "--" rather than a coma (,) for a pause, at times so frequent that reading is difficult and confusing. A good editor that wont accept such would greatly aid in a better story.
Instead of complaining about something that is comparatively trivial and does little to detract from reading ease, why not attack the hundreds of writers who appear never to have gone to school ie. the ones who can't spell at all, use 'than' instead of 'then', don't know what apostrophies are for, etc..
My self i tought it was a great story daddy & daughter fucking she getting the best fuck of her life & daddy was so happy wtf is wrong with that not one dam thing it was great keep up the good work my man.
I noticed you had nothing good to say about the story. Apparently you had nothing good to stay about the story.
You did a great job. The story itself is more important than the small errors. What good is a error free story if the story sucks. Keep up the good work and I look forward to your next story.
I love incest stories,dad daughter,bro,sis,and uncle niece!For 1st story it got me hard and stroking
I loved that the daughter was still grasping at the last thread of reason, and yet her body was yearning for her father. The tension between these two urges, one man-made, and one instinctive, was so raw that the emotion created was beautiful.
Great job. Loved the metaphors!
I'd like to see you continue this story. Seems like you might have been aiming at a one shot but you left it open enough that you could easily continue. Would love to see that happen.
I agree with most of the other reviewers except of course for the one complaining about your very minor mistakes. Not everyone is perfect and you can find minor errors in published books as well. Thank you for a wonderfully erotic read and again hope to see more.
NOW HAVING STATED MY FEELINGS OF THE STORY, EYE WOOD LIKE TWO ADDRESS THIS HEAR PART TOO (WONDER-WHERE)..THIS STORY WAS INN ENGLISH & EWE RESPONDED INN ENGLISH... SEW IT MUST MEAN THAT EWE COULD & DID READ IT..THE PRINT WAS GOOD, THE WORD SPACING IS ALL-SEW GOOD THEIR-FOUR,THIS HEAR WAS EASY TOO READ..& BEING EASY TWO READ MEANS THAT THE STORY WAS EASY TOO FOLLOW & UNDER -STAND..INN CLOSING PLZ. DEW KNOT COMPLAIN ABOUT MY SHABBY SPELLING, BEE-CAUSE ITS MOORE OF ANN ISSUE WITH WORD USAGE THAN SPELLING...SEW EWE SEA ( WITH ALL OF THIS INFORMATION ) IT IS AN EXCELLENT READ... ( -:
Well, the daughter's character was pretty good, but dad? My God what a weak kneed pussy . . . .