All Comments on 'Public Slut Ch. 02'

What happened before noon? You went from the keeper dressing you to too many cooks by noon with no details in between. Bit disappointing after I went to find chapter one after finding chapter 2 first.

I think the time jump was fine. I love the story. I would be glad to read more of this. My only note is to maybe have someone proofread for you. You have a couple of grammatical errors. But please, keep writing! I'm very interested in your work.

Your writing has definitely improved over the past year.

Also, you should definitely be using the "free use" tag, since that's the most accurate tag for this story. I understand it's a pain to update your story's tags once submitted, but it will be worth it because accurate tagging will drive more traffic to your stories.

Horrible