by sensitivelystrong
Talk about some nerve. He fucks her then ignores her for over two months, then has the nerve to b mad.
the phrase you are looking for is last ditch effort. Interesting story. I look forward to reading more.
more more more more please keep going keep writing cuz its getting to juicy
That line had me dying, I could just picture that. But I like this story .there's a ridiculous amount of spelling/grammar mistakes nevertheless it's a good story.
I love this story, love your style of writing and the characters you've created. Pleasee finish it :) pretty please
Love to see how this plays out, any chance of you finishing the story?
This is soooo good! I'm glad you took this story in this direction. I kinda don't want you to do the whole generic "she ends up with David" thing because he really is not ready. He claims to want to be with her but it's just coming across as she was the last girl he hadn't been with. Gerard is the better man by far. I liked him from the beginning. Maybe Gerard was tired of seeing David treat girls like crap too? David needs to learn how to treat women with respect and his Mother should have intervened on his behavior a long time ago. Please continue this story!!!
This series is one of the best. I agree David isn't ready but I'm not sure she should end up with Gerard. Which ever direction that you take this story I can't wait to read the next chapters.
I got a feeling Gerald is a rebound guy. Dee nor David know how to communicate what they want with each other. That is why a relationship will not work with them. They need to work on themselves before pursuing a relationship.
Just stumbled upon this story and I love it. I think ultimately after time (college, a little real life) David should realize he loves Deina and then they could be together. He's too selfish right now and Deina deserves a good guy. You're a really good writer. The errors and typos don't bother me - I understood what u were trying to say. Please finish this story. Thanks
Great story. Not sure how anyone can say the errors and typos don't bother them. It makes it less believable to someone with proper grammar. I am fixing the grammar as i read, which is irritating. You should have someone edit for you. The important thing is your ideas. Having an editor only enhances the delivery and makes it that much better. You already have great ideas. Yes this is an amateur site, but like everyone else who reads stories, it is nice to truly visualize the stories. That is hard to do when there are errors.
aww come back. my heart just broke so bad. uhh i dont like stories that just leave at a time lik this.
i kinda like were you took the story and that deina finally told david off
david was hell bent doe this dee chick then after he fucked her he talks about being friends? the hell ;l i won be rereading this story
I love your story but f
David is too much of a jackass and his head is in his ass and constantly puts his foot in his mouth buuut he does deserve a chance with her please make him a good guy he has potential and please finish it your doing a great job :)