All Comments on 'Rachel Goes to the Movies'

I thought your story overall was good. Good idea and the sex scenes were well done. But you have needless stuff in here about where she goes and who she talks to and asked for directions - you could have cut a lot of stuff out and made the story tighter - you also need to watch your spelling in places it is really bad and you sometimes use the wrong word entirely. But I would like to read about Rachel again.

nice

Fix your spelling