All Comments on 'Racing Towards Love Pt. 01'

Got confused on first page as the first person narrative changed character with no warning. First it was Elise, then I guessed it was Brian and not her perving Cheryl's boobs.

Easy mistake to make but hard to read.

I agree with GforG comment that change of first person point of view narrative without cue can be confusing to a reader. Easily remedied as many writers do by lining out with repeated symbols between breaks with new narrrative character's name atop next paragraph.

Otherwise, thoroughly enjoy all your work. Finding this first chapter most entertaining. Looking fwd to ensuing ones. Kudos!

WS

Looking forward to Ch. 02.