All Comments on 'Ratter Ch. 01'

you are going to continue this right....cause i cannot wait for this to keep going

I'm hooked! Hope you're going to continue!!!BBAB

Yep, you got me hooked. I was pretty disappointed that there wasn't a second page--but there's going to be more soon, right? :-)

Really looking forward to Chapter 2!

Lily -x-

I can tell this is gonna be uber awesome cant wait till the next one.please dont wait long to post.

Liked it, enought teasers in there for you to flesh out in the coming (hint, hint) chapters. Am not the most observant reader for spellings, as have dyslexic family members, so you learn to read what SHOULD be there not what IS there but nothing jumped out at me :) PJ xx

Loved this short, but very good first chapter!

I'm a little confused as to how she'd be able to get to the bathroom herself after the description of her leg...but perhaps that'll be explained in chapter 2...

Please post soon!

it was good . . . a little bit more length woudl've been nice but oh well. I've added it to my favourites and i hope you dont take long to update :)

Really GOOD start. Hope more to be coming SOOON!!!

Have an idea what SEERE is but need a few more clues.

Can't wait to find out more about Seere. The dialogue is also natural and funny. Hope you post the next chapter soon. Thanks for writing!

when there's no sex? I hope this is a promise of what's to come ([snicker] sorry for the pun). I like the prose, so please follow through.

As stated, we apologize in advance to the author of this story for using this comment box to send a message to another seriously inept "want-to-be" author. For the record, we enjoyed this "particular story" which proves there are some great writers on this site. Anyway, here is the message to be delivered to the readers & other authors on this site:

Attention: Bonnietaylor & sidekick "wisheswhitewomen" -

This author [named above] is terrible at drafting anything that resembles a decent plot line with nominal & basic sentence structure. And then on top of the author's incompetence, we are exposed to the immaturity & "over-the-top" comments made by the author and some idiot named; 'wantwhitewomen". Has this site sunk so low to allow such excrement to exist on this site? OMG, if there was an IQ requirement to post something on this site, these idiots would fail without a doubt. So back to the original message - author, get some serious editing assistance and quit making yourself look so "stupid". Furthermore, shed the relationship of that fucked-up sidekick you seem to adore and emulate. In other words, "get real" and stop the immature drivel you profess to be your best efforts. Quit while you may still have some respect to be gained!

An interesting start. Well written, good editing, but a little on the short side. Longer chapters in the future would be nice. I'd like to see more of this.

Really good start. The character introduction was good and you have gained my interest. Keep up the good work and update soon :)

Really good start. Well written, suspenseful, good sexual tension already, and lots of questions that need to be answered. Update soon.

Not a bad start. Off to read chapter two.

You got me hooked, more! *cheeky grin*