All Comments on 'Recruited'

If this is indeed your first submission here ... nicely done.

Excellent writing, a great story line and a nice flow to a great conclusion of chapter #1. More chapters are needed, Lois you left us dangling, as a retired Navy Chief, I want to know if Lois/you(?) dropped the Navy idea and jumped on the Jesse bandwagon for the future.

BRAVO!

So -- hair on Jesse's chest and abs or not? Her hands flutter across his chest, but no mention of hairy areas??

The jumping-into-bed on the first night is one of my big bugbears, I prefer to take it slower, but this is essentially quite well-written. I picked up one typo - "The rum doesn't have that effect one me" (superfluous 'e' tacked on the end of 'on') - but most stories on this site commit more and greater offences than that. I'd like to see a sequel to this, describing the development of the relationship: I think the characters have mileage in them.