All Comments on 'Red Ch. 02'

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belgarion10101belgarion10101over 6 years ago
Your scene transitions were not clear

But I definitely liked the first chapter. The second chapter is less exciting, though I can tell that it leads into a larger story. The prose seems to flow well, but I am, as a white male, not so far connecting to any of the characters within the story. I hope you keep up the good work.

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