All Comments on 'Red Orifice Pt. 01'

I enjoyed your story & am curious to read more BUT I found your wording jarred on me sometimes, you used some words in the wrong context and it was a distraction.

I also found it odd that Sven wanted to be rough with her, forcing her YET he tried not to hurt her fragile body with his thrusts - that's a contradiction. But these are minor points, your story was a sexy scenario with a hint of menace & mystery to it. well done.