All Comments on 'Red Pt. 02'

How suddenly the plot changed.My wishes . Shana makes Avi to follow his fetishes.

Avi do Japanese tattoo body suit and piercings.And then Shana agrees to make a full body tattoo and piercings.Photographer you can work and being a freak .

Waiting for the next part !

... well done. You have created growth in your characters, furthered your plot and allowed the initial chapter to stand as something more. A difficult feat for many writers, but done seemlessly. Keep it up, bit now work on your dialogue....

I loved the complete change in the story. And how the charactwes found equal ground. Nice. Will there be another part?

Please do continue with this - I check your profile when I log in to see if you've updated!

More. Definitely more