All Comments on 'Redemption Falls'

i really liked this and found my self quite involved with the characters in you story but i'm hoping there will be more to this.. its seems like a very untimely and abrupt ending here...

I loved the story and got involved in the story and people I hope there is more as I really want to know what happens

Without going into a great amount of detail, I kinda muffed this one. Yes, there is supposed to be more to this story. I will post it as soon as I possibly can. Please remember these stories are my guilty pleasure. I write them to offset the angst of my other work. Without going into the whole word count, story lenght and formatting thing, I finished this part of the story and had to close it while I worked on something else. Unknowingly, I sent it to my editors and beavered on with my bad self. When I got it back, I checked the corrections and notes, made sure it was formatted correctly and posted it without doing a complete read through. Many apologies.

Thanks, The Author

It definitely needs more smoothing out and a lot of details here and there to fill it in. It kept me going for 9 pages, so that's a great sign. I'm kind of a prick when it comes to reading these. I go more for plot and characters than I do for sex. Much more, in fact.

Great character development and I enjoyed the out of the blue element with Tara, but I'd have liked a little more chemistry between them initially. Also the villains (Allen and Trace) need to be fleshed out more. They strike me as the same person, although one talks a bit differently.

All in all, I'd say you could add 1000 or more words to really fluff this up into something polished and presentable.

Looking forward to the continuation if you feel up to writing a few more lines for us critical readers.

Loved it, all 9 pages. Got quite involved with all of the characters and looking forward to the next chapter. No pressure but bring it on.

Great story

I really loved all the twists and turns. Keep up the great writing.

This was so enjoyable to read, and I love the plot! I knew the sex would be great once we actually got to it, and I found myself wondering which woman it would be with? I was surprised at who it was, but pleasantly! I see there's another part to this, and I hope I know where this is headed ... ~ L

MyHandy, congrats on the power of this story. The brilliant, realistic ending makes this story like a river. Always flowing on across a slowly changing landscape.

I've been through similar familial disasters and at this endpoint of my life, I realize that there is no real ending to our personal stories. All that ends is our personal experience.

While I agree that every story doesn't need a happy ending ("A Match Made". "McKayla's Miracle", "Finally Meeting Morgan" some excellent examples), after all that these ladies have been through PLEASE give them at least a partial happy ending?

a great story , a good ending , not a cliff hanger nor an everybodys all luved up ending , just right ....well done .

Ok a 10th chapter would be great.Mary and Sherry should hook up since Amber is taken .

It took a while to get going, but once it did; it's really really good! Thank you!

This story is difficult to read without making Trace sound like Eric Cartman.

Very enjoyable read...thanks!

I'd say providing a half way house for abused women is a happy ending. Getting two young mothers away from abusive SOBs is a good thing. I don't mean them going thru that was happy, but them getting away, oh yeah!

5/5

J

Always loved this story.

Sad, funny yet well told. Every emotion goes through me when I read this.

Like most, I get angry at the spousal abuse, but there are amusing parts too. A great story, well told.