by Fuzzypen
You had a golden opportunity for some drama and conflict to make this an actual story. Instead you have sex and more sex backed up by sex. Writing about sex just for sex sake gets boring after so many chapters. You need some conflict to increase the drama otherwise you just have a collection of trysts. I think you missed a good opportunity to make this a great story. It's still decent but just the same ole, same ole as the other chapters.
...write it how you want to. However, I do agree with the comment about adding some conflict (or something other than sex *gasp*) to spice things up. If nothing happens besides whats already happened things are going to get boring fast and this story won't have much more of a future.
Paige should punish his sister how sex slave and lesbian bondage.
Dont know about this one.. where is the justice for their betrayal? Lillian in so many ways deserves far worse treatment, not getting it all her own way.. this needs some vindication.
One of the best mom-daughter incest stories i have recently read. BRAVO !
Still no resiment but did have a small revenge act need to show the jealously between the 3 you can't get away without doing so