All Comments on 'Reinventing Mom: Almost Perfect Pt. 02'

Part two is better than the first, almost perfect!

Almost perfect up to the point where you introduced anal , that totally fucked the whole story for me .

By her giving her ass first she soiled him. Brilliant.

IT'S NOT FINISHED. HOW ABOUT THE REAL FUCK.? YOU CAN'T MAKE LOVE TO AN ASSHOLE, UNLESS YOUR GAY. (BUT THATS ANOTHER STORY) . A GOOD STORY, BUT THE ENDING WAS QUITE A LET DOWN. ........................................................................................................................... A FAN.......................LAROC OF AGES

in fact it is, to use your creative device, almost great. When you chose not let them use other forms of accepted contraception, and took a heated romance anal, (to borrow from agent 96) sadly you missed it by ---------------------------------------/------------------------------------- that much.

The anal fucked it up totally! Soon as I saw where things were headed, I stopped reading and skipped to the comments section.

I am really enjoying this and it is well written, at a decent pace. All I would say is that the unnecessary switch from first to third person is a bit clumsy. Some editing before publication will fix that. Keep up the good work!