All Comments on 'Rejection & Acceptance'

You need an editor.

"Disguised by her toes" ???

What about her toes made her harder to recognize?

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You NEED an editor! Seriously!

“Disguised by her toes, she decided to look at something more favourable”

Disguised? Really, she was disguised by her toes?

“She was eyeing the front M&M in the front”

No need to repeat IN THE FRONT.

‘”The climax came when the woman grabbed a cup of coffee near hear”

It was near HEAR? Don’t you mean HER?

I didn't get much further than that, you also need to learn where the comma's go, half the time in the bit I read, you had them in the wrong place or completely missing.

Yes, an editor would have helped. Beyond those issues the story itself was not bad. It is a story that a lot of people will relate to. The title is very good.