by Egmont Grigor
wrote in short: 'Was This Translated From Another Language?
Some of the worst dialogue ever, plus no degree of believability whatsoever. No more, thank you.'
Well, no more from you Anon of Bost. Go read somewhere else. Hell, the arrogance of some of you people and willingness to emote excessively and stupidly. Smack your hand and say I promise to be a reasonable person. For fuck sake, who said any story on this site has to have some degree of believability. Actually, my story has lots of believability and well as parts that were simply made up. Well, it is fiction. EG
and some not so rich. The woman is a prostitute, she has been since college. Now she is getting ready to begin giving it away. She is portrayed as very self indulgent and egotistical, was that intended. Other than having money now, she is just plain trash and a possible AIDS palace.
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This reads <i>really</i> badly! Some of the worst dialogue ever, plus no degree of believability whatsoever. Kind of like it was originally written by a 14yo foreign student, then given to a sub-literate 14yo American kid to "fix up".
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No more, thank you.
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