All Comments on 'Remember When?'

Crap

I thought it was quite good.

There seemed to be a plot in there, but it needs clarifying.

you could do a good flash back if your life depended on it. delete and rewrite it using a GOOD EDITOR and start at the beginning and work forward, it would be better and longer. don't use flash backs any more you suck at them always start at the beginning and move forward.

Fuck all the other comments. A work of art does not need reboots. It is superbly written.

There are also some good constructive suggestions in some of the comments. However, "crap" is not constructive and is more a reflection on the person commenting than on the writer.

Wouldn't that just give the toll collector a thrill? LMAO!!

You need to clarify the point when a flashback occurs -- use of a physical page break like underlines or asterisks across about one-fourth of page. Otherwise it gets confusing (you could also use italics to show a different line of thought).

You have writen a great start to an even greater story. Now, when are you goin to write more of it? Please do not leave us hanging at the edge of this cliff.

poor spelling and no editing ( wrong words and letters are missing from some ) plus a bad flashback all equals a total FAILURE. delete and read the how to articles before you try writing again and ALWAYS use a GOOD EDITOR before posting.