All Comments on 'Returning Home is a Furry Experience Ch. 01'

You must have put a lot of effort into this story, but it is very, very difficult to read. Please, try to find an editor to help you smoothe the rough edges of your work and keep trying. You will only get better with practice.

Maybe I should look into some furs..*L* ... ATB/ Tacit Blue

Very hard to read, makes my head hurt. Feels like an actors runthrough of a screenplay.

I keep waiting for.

Location - School hallway.

Atmosphere - Dark

etc etc.

What a lot of effort you put into making this story such hard work. When you realize you're trudging through a story, that's when you have to give up and call it a lost cause. Get an editor, please, and not just for grammar, but one who will advise you on story layout, content, and construction; I would suggest anyone who has Freshman English or Expository Writing 101, someone who understands the 5 basic rules any story must follow, because your writing style is terrible.

I fucking love it keep it up