All Comments on 'Reunion'

I loved your story. I hope to see more.

The dialogue and writing are awkward, but the story shines through. Literotica has a volunteer editor program that would help your writing shine. Keep writing!

The prose and dialogue feel forced, and the shifts in point of view - first to third person, Chloe to Emily and back - made this a confusing read at points. The plot itself is interesting, though.

it sounds a lot like what has happened to me before. I enjoyed it! Grammar a little strange but otherwise very nice :)

I liked it - and for the most part could feel the story even when the writing got a little awkward. I didn't like the "beg" or "crawl" thing, it seemed out of character and just didn't fit. Still, this is a great first submission. Thanks for sharing!