by lesliejones
I got a bit confused about whether or not they'd done it together before, but it was made clear, eventually. A nice, tender bro/sis tale.
Lukas
P.S. Ages in your Bio differ...
I keep trying your stories- not quite into them yet, but your photo (including the cane) really turns me on. I'll keep reading
This was the first time I read one of your stories, you show alot of promise but I didn't get it really. There is no way Sal and Ned could stay away frome each other for 20+ years when they were so very close as kids and young adults. I also was confused as to whether they had sex when younger even though you said in the beginning they hadn't. There is no denying the story was very hot though. All in all I think you show much promise as a writer of erotic fiction.
Thanks for posting and I will read some more.
JP
Lesley,,
You sure have a way with words and this was well put together and very intimate, delightful read!!!
Thanks
I am amazed that a submission so gently put has not had a monster list of comments. Just loved the sweet way sis' n bro' reacted to each other, no rush, no pressure on each other, extreme truth and candour, pure sensuality in a wonderful story.
If I was looking for some Moby Dick or Sherlock Holmes fan fiction. You are a good writer, but your style is entirely too dry for erotica. People don't talk/act this way in real life. Maybe it is the age difference (I'm in my 20s), but I just couldn't get into this.
So well written. No rush. The story moves at a very acceptable pace and is so very erotic. Don't worry about calculating ages, this is something that could so easily happen (and does).Well done!
While I didn't have a sister I did have a beautiful, sexy sister-in-law. The flow of your story brought back some wonderful memories of her and our times together. I look forward to reading more of your stories.
And great! Love the dirty things these two siblings do to & fir each other....Its ALWAYS better with family;)
EROTIC.
Thank you for posting this excellent short story, of incest among the more mature population.
Having just reread this story I wonder whether anonymous below had even read your introduction, no I agree that there is no erotic action on the first page but that page sets up the characters and situation for the mature incestuous relationship to fully develop on the second page.
I liked this story, could have been longer with a little more buildup and follow up, sib sex is always good but when there is a bond and a connection, that's when it goes to a great story.