All Comments on 'Reunited'

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 17 years ago
Want... more...

please! continue the story! i want to know how long they bask in the afterglow before they dive in again. ;)

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 17 years ago
Good but it needs to be tweaked a little.

If you are looking to interest your audience and keep them aroused, you need to add more to the story it was good to start then I got to the end and thought that you deprived us. I have never had a climax that I didn't feel and I know that if you had sex you would want to see to it that is was long and not over in two minutes. So just add a little more tothe climaxes and you will have a work of art.

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