All Comments on 'Rhythm and the Blue Line Ch. 11'

Ah! the joys of working away from home, I did it all my working life cost me two marriage, but they loved spending all the money I made. Keep it going, I love this story so far. Thanks

Peter

I usually love your stories, and have loved this one, but I'm kind of disappointed there is so much drama between them, it seems to me that it always about Ryan and Ryan doesn't much care about anything else, so what if she isn't good with relationships, is it any reason to keep treating Brody this way when he disagrees about something, she is incredibly selfish.

I like this story but I'm agreeing the drama between these two is crazy. I'm to the point of saying please break them up and have them move on, but I know there is a point to the madness so I'm just going with the story until we get there. I do have to ask whats going to happen next because these two can't seem to get it together

Agree with others that these two seem to be unable to really communicate with each other without too much drama and it is wearing a bit. Frankly, it is hard to comment without stopping to realize they are not real people, just characters created by the writer and the words you chose to represent them make us react as though they were people we know.

An example is when Ryan goes into the bedroom and Brody sees her naked except for the guitar. The dialog went as follows"

"You sure? I can always get dressed again."

"No, you're fine."

Fine?? Fine!!???????... For crying out loud, that is about as restrained a response as I can ever imagine when you see your lover naked in your bedroom after six weeks without any personal contact, let alone sex. Brody should have said something like "Oh my god, you are so beautiful and sexy and I just want to hold you for hours and make love to you over and over until we are so hungry that we have to crawl to the kitchen"

OK, sorry, a writer I am not, but you get the point. Everything about these characters is restrained as though they constantly circle each other wondering when one of them is going to say something a little off and then the defenses go up and off they go again into a little snit. Even the sex when they got together was restrained to the max. They has sex once and then did not again the next morning. There is no dialog between then that once is a bit restrained, although I recognize the effects of the concussion may be a factor, but at least some discussion about that would seem to be in order as part of normal communication between lovers.

I love your writing and you choose the words, but somewhere, sometime there has to be a breakthrough between these two. On the other hand, when they finally do the story will be nearing an end, although with the family issues Ryan has you could mine that vein for some time. (hint, hint)

Remember the old saw "If we didn't love you, we wouldn't criticize" LOL.

I just hope that the two of them can work their problems out I do think that Brody is a bit selfish and should of been happy for her to get a chance to follow her dream.

Ryan should stop running and talk things over with Brody and also stop being so self centered. These two really do need an intervention and i hope that they get it

great chapter just am sad to see it end on a low note after the big build up for their reunion

this story is supposed to be coming to an end but at this point it seems like such a mess. it makes me think that the story might not have a have a happy ending after all. i think they'll just break up. or worse, they'll patch up, but they'll have so many unresolved issues dangling under their noses that it'll be pretty obvious that they're not going to last long.

please please please make this story have a happy ending and at least resolve some of the issues. i love brody and ryan. i love the fact that they're both so cool. they're funny, independent and caring. this story has been my primary depression-buster for months now. please don't let it end in a mess. :'(

while everyone seems to be on Brody's side, here is Ryan's side, she gets one of the biggest opportunities of her career to make big on her dream, he complains about leaving, if he truly does love her, he would over the moon for her and not bitch about the time she won't spend with him. But this is just my view point.

Donna

Dear PennLady

You have written another great in this story. It seems a Brody has a double standard, with his career and Ryan's career. He seems to not realize that her career is as important as his at this time. I hope they can get this relationship going in the right direction and can communicate back and forth about how much they love each other. Neither one of them has told the other, how much they love each other. But it's pretty evident from the way you've written this story so far. I hope you write more about these two and hopefully the relationship does work and Brody wakes up and understands what Ryan is trying to do with her career. Keep up the good work

But I bet that they get past this. Relationships are seldom easy, and you have to develop the skills to work through rough patches. Both Ryan and Brody have demanding careers with a high degree of risk and uncertainty about making it and staying on top. That's part of what suits them to one another. I'm confident that they will come around quickly and learn to cherish the time they have together rather than complaining about how it's in short supply. Brody really can join Ryan on the road...and that's something that very few couples can swing for much time, much less a summer.

Congrats, PennLady, on continuing to keep us rink side for your story.

must say i am surprised by this blow up...brody complaining of ryan's crazy schedule? ryan not understanding why brody's upset? oh well, i guess reality-wise it does happen when both parties become self-centered for a while....hopefully, ryan gets over her insecurities which make her run away all the time and learn to compromise; and brody to learn to compromise too and realize that ryan's just starting with her chosen career - he could always join her on tour, same as being an athlete's wife i would say = whole lot of waiting around with snatches of time spent together here and there but still it's time spent with each other...they can work out the scheduling but they really need to talk abt where they stand in their relationship

Now imagine how I felt when the fight started, while I was copy-editing this story. I wanted to yell "No no no!" Then I realized it's "just a story". But with SA Penn Lady, it's not "just a story"; look at these comments. She's made these characters real. Great work by a superlative writer.

having had multiple concussions myself, I can relate to how Brody feels. This fight could potentially have little to do with Ryan and a hell of a lot to do with Brody having to compensate for his symptoms. Major symptoms of concussions include irritability, sadness, depression, confusion. There's a lot for Pennlady to work with. I have my own theories about what this fight will be about. I was quite surprised by the accuracy of your writing about the concussion symptoms. Not many people get it, but you allude to it very nicely. As always, great writing :)

This really is a superlative story line. The attention to detail is fantastic. It really is something to see all the various obstacles thrown in the way between these two as they try and develop their relationship, but nothing in the story telling feels forced or fake.

I hope Ryan and Brody manage to work it out!

Glad to get caught up on this story. I hope both of them come to their senses very soon and don't waste the three weeks they have together.

...finally made its appearance! :)

Brody is dazed and confused following his concussion and reacts poorly to Ryan's sudden change of plans. This is so unusual for him. Surely, Ryan will realize he's on her side once her anger dissipates.

Nice job as usual, PL. On to Chapter Twelve!