All Comments on 'Rifts Ch. 01'

...we don't see near enough Rifts fic these days. =)

Is this going to be an OG, or Savage? Time will tell!

interesting start, i ll w8 and hope for more to come soon ^^

Very good start. You kept it interesting and didn't get straight into a big sex scene. Most new stories try that without a descent plot to carry the reason for the sex. Well done.

Structure and grammar were pretty good. No major typos that pissed me off.

Nice cliff hanger ending. You have my interest. Good luck and enjoy your writing.

I like the story so far BUT the grammatical errors are so bad and so numerous that it takes away from the enjoyment. I hope you can get some help or an editor for this story.