All Comments on 'Rise of Seductra'

This was very fun to read! The main thing that's bugging me is the grammar. Here's a tip:

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'Aaaarrggghhhhhh!!' He screamed in pleasure and his cock spurted uncontrollably

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In dialogue tags, you don't need to capitalize the first letter. So, "he screamed", not "He screamed".

Also, you should start new sentences when whole new actions happen that aren't related, or MAKE them related by changing it to "pleasure, AS his cock". They're defs separate clauses.

Nice work! :)

awesome mate hope you write more

Please Write more. I beg you. Please.

Excellent. Please continue with the next Part in your series. Very keen to read "The abduction of Captain Steel." Seductra is a very worthy Supercriminal and deserves as many episodes /"parts" as you can write.

Thanks for sharing this story