by Black2Passion
I like the story for what it is...I guess I wish the guys would use somewhat better English given they are in college. i understand using some slang, but I think they should be a bit more literate, being in college. I'm surprised Candi would be with a homophobe. Given the fact that Romeo has to be around her on occasion and Jacob calls him a faggot, I am surprised she'd tolerate it.
I'd recommend an editor. I think it would help to have their feedback.
I think the way you're writing your story is very good! :) awe romeo and tre are cute n ooou candi and jacob -.-
Interesting story with minimal plot and collegians can speak complete sentences