by scorpionicus45
...as soon as you had a satisfying cum. You came almost at the same time. They don't really make 'cums' that way. Sorry to be so critical but you need to know stuff like this if you're going to improve your writing & you do need to improve, DRASTICALLY!
Has the potential for multiple characters and the inclusion of many types of interest. First time and exhibitionist already in there many yet to go. Hope you won't get discouraged by anonymous comments they're jealous spoilers to be ignored.
Time to expand with more roommates and interests. I thought it was very hot having his shoot his load in her unprotected pussy, that's one of my hot buttons.