All Comments on 'Rosemary and Her Daddy Ch. 01'

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ualmech88 almost 6 years ago

Daddy has found a wonderful pet

Very good first submission. Got me hard from the start. Keep it uo.:)

KatherineAlex almost 6 years ago

Editing and word choices

Good start. You would benefit from an editor and you need to work on word choice. The word 'slightly' was used in 2 consecutive paragrahs more than 6 times, it was predictable and took away from the story a bit. Could also be longer.

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Here's the rundown: My early DDLG stuff is well inspired but (in my opinion and hey I'm my worst critic) I feel that I've definitely grown as a creative writer since then. Bottom line: don't expect high quality writing from my earlier works (also this is a free erotica website...

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