All Comments on 'Rough Draft: Twisted Ink Raine and Deak'

Really enjoyed reading Jack, Ben and now Raine and Deck's story! Please continue writing x

Only thing I'd say if I was being harsh is the point of view changes need to be more noticeable but otherwise great storyline and characters!!!

You need some sort of indication that you've changed which characters point of view, all your writing needs a lot of editing. 2*

I agree with the people who said that you need to better define when points of view change, or write each chapter in one point of view. It was extremely confusing in places astangible.switched from one person to another really quickly and no real indication that the POV had changed for several sentences.

That said Damn this story was hot! God I'd love to be in Tyler's place! The love between Rain and Deak was as beautiful as it was steamy which is to say it was very yummy and tangible.

Looking forward to more.