All Comments on 'Runaway Piper Ch. 02'

Keep writing!

Good story, just make them longer.

its a bit short,a good 5 minute read.I know it takes alot to make it 2 pages or more,,but it draws the reader in more and you really do need an editor-proof reader,comma's,, some left out words,periods,i had a hard time following some sentences,,,but,overall,,,a good job,,hope you keep it up..

If you'd read the story aloud you would have heard the errors. Sentence structure and typos. If you can't find and editor, ask a friend to help you out. This chapter lacked a lot of explanations as did the first. Needs a lot more meat. Hoping you learn from the comments from these two chapters. Sadly I don't want to read anymore because you did not take advice that was given.

It's a good story . editing would be nice but its not the be all end all ... more importantly your characters and story are interesting..keep it up please

I hope you continue.... I hope her and Nik end up together.