- Interracial Love
- Ryan Ch. 04
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All Comments on 'Ryan Ch. 04'
by MissPrimrose222
- 23 Comments
Anonymousalmost 11 years agoLovely. 1 gripe though I think you meant to say "shuddered" when your body trembles instead of "stuttered" which you do when speaking. Otherwise great story, am in love with both characters.
MissPrimrose222almost 11 years agoAuthorIt's so funny that you mention that. I read a comment and the person went off on the author because she made that same mistake using shuttered instead of shuddered. I said to myself that I'd have to be careful not to do that. But sometimes, no matter how careful you are your brain sees the word you THINK you typed instead of the one you did type. As I understand it, it's because the brain does not read every word, it fills in. I know the difference, but as they say shit happens. lol. I'm also writing three stories at the same time. Thanks for reading and I'm glad that you enjoyed it, even if it made you shudder. lol
Anonymousalmost 11 years agoDo we really need minute descriptions of what is in a room? That's just boring. Whole meeting his family was very stilted.
IronDragonalmost 11 years agoMy wife and I have been reading this series together, and we both love it. :)
5 Big Stars.
Black_Dragon_Princessover 10 years agoI have my very own 'Ryan' with my husband!!!! we love your series tho!!!!
I Love My Man!!!!!! ;3
MissPrimrose222over 10 years agoAuthorI'm happy you and your guy are enjoying my story; he's very talented. I love how you support his writing. As for my story, I had it in my head about 2 years before I started writing anything. Writing some parts was definitely challenging and I'm sure you know which parts lol. Anyway, I appreciate you taking the time to read it and comment.
IronDragonover 10 years agoMy lovely wife had a double espresso from Starbuck's earlier. She's been bouncing off the walls ever since. :D
fluerover 10 years agoI love this story. The sex scenes are off the chain. And Dani's mom is hilarious.
You got skills. You should think about publishing this story.
Anonymousover 10 years agoThis story is perfect! I usually don't like series, but I'm so happy I tried this one!
Anonymousover 10 years agoI really like this series so far, but, I have a question. So far, the tone of her skin has been described for ways: coffee with a lot of cream, caramel, brown skinned, and milk chocolate. Which one is it? Besides that, I really like this. Keep it up!
MissPrimrose222over 10 years agoAuthorI'm really not good at describing skin color relative to FOOD, but that seems to be what we're stuck with. I would say when I thought about the skin color, it was more medium caramel than anything. To me even caramel isn't one color, but has variations.
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It doesn't help that dictionary definitions of caramel range from beige to dark brown and a moderate yellow brown. There is a wide range of colors between the 2 definitions. The longer you cook caramel, the darker it becomes. I also found it interesting that the color Mocha is described as a dark OLIVE brown and in another dictionary a dark Chocolate brown. You might find other colors as you go along. lol.
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Anyway, I probably got lost on the skin color because I was writing 3 stories at the same time. I'll pay close attention to that when I'm editing the other two. When I do the final edit to my copy of Ryan I will be sure to choose ONE color. Thanks for the comment. :-)
Bjthebearalmost 10 years agoAnd that is what readers of your work will become if you ever seek to get published. Great story with fantastic character development and squeeze your legs together sex scenes.
