All Comments on 'Sabella & Malcolm Ch. 04'

Great although short. Can't wait for next chapter.

Gloria and her boss need their asses kicked. Who needs enemies when you have 'friends' like this.

I already watched General Hospital.

Not much happening

So far, the story is interesting. But where's the sex???? Come on! This IS Literotica.com, just reminding you in case you'd forgotten. Please move things forward by writing LONGER stories.

sofar so fantastic! I have read more than one or two of your stories and I have loved every one. What I like the most is the fact that you take the time to develope the plot and the characters. I also really like the fact that most of the conflict comes from outside the relationship and the characters, through their love for each other,are able to conquer the problem, whatever it is. I'm sure I'm becomming your number one fan.

I like this story but I am getting tired of the hummer being referred to as her baby. I got it, she is proud of the purchase. I still love the story though.

Such an interesting story.

At least Mark and Regina believe Sabella's story. Gloria is up to no good. Malcolm and Sabella get along well. This time travel mystery is intriguing.

so the premise of selling a house in need of repairs, then offering to buy it back at a loss is very weak. All a DA would have to do is look at the recorded deed transactions, and see the multiple sales in a short period of time, and the crooked real estate boss, and the woman would be going to jail. Property sales are public records in all 50 states.

I know, you're probably going to say it's fiction, but fiction, especially science fiction depends greatly on 'suspension of disbelief'. This is when a reader is willing to accept something such as time travel, if given a relatively reasonable explanation.

A reader might also believe a 2009 cell phone would work through time, from 1954 back to 2009, IF there's an explanation. BUT the crooked house deal story? That's a no go. Just like if you tried to make 1954 Tyler Texas, not be racist.

GeoD