All Comments on 'Sally's Sexy Story Pt. 01'

If they are happy being like this, what can we say? "Go for it and be happy!!!" They have found the right partner in "crime"...2*

You really, really need an editor. This was a complete trainwreck.

Give up the wife and get a girlfriend and refrain from sex with each other for the short future of the marriage. Where the mind goes the marriage will follow and she is already heading down the garden path toward oblivion.

We have enough work clicking those ones already.

If this was your 1st story I'd rate it a 3 or 4 on the strength of your story line. However, you have quite a few submissions, so I rated it a 2. Why?

You used several periods where you should have used a comma. (I use too damn many and you don't use enough---go figure.) No, this isn't being nit-piking, the resulting incomplete sentence makes it hard to read.

Second point---it's so short and I felt it was incomplete. Short is okay if you complete the story, you didn't, and even if you plan a second chapter, you left this one hanging.

Since I wrote the above I took a closer look at your Bio page. Man you have a hell of a score average for loving wives! Don't pay any attention to my ramblings. I normally get a full point below you on LW. KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!

Juvenile

Great if it's just fantasy for them to have fun but if she's act on it then she's just another pig humiliating hubby and herself

....too bad. Something new would be most welcome.

Is there any more of this story to come I'd like to read more of Sally's tale.

Looking forwatd to part 2

1*, nothing more needs to be said