All Comments on 'Sam's Discovery'

I like equal opportunity stories

I like how the jock surprised him with going down on him and taking his cock first. That seems to be the best ways too break the ice. neither is top or bottom. maybe one has a mom, that will watch and get herself off watching

god this is boring repetative same old crap.?

as a wank story.?

I pull my dick out of his ass; I take the condom off, and cum all over his sexy body. The mixture of cum on his abs makes him look even sexier then before.

I slip out of his ass

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does he have 2 dicks-?- cause you have him pulling a dick out twice

This story was hot and definitely needs more added to it!

WOOOOOWWW!!!! I LOVED IT!!! OMG!!!! Would love to see how this story has progressed!

Hello,

I did enjoy the general gyst of the story, but there were a few issues.

-Sentence Fluency: Was not good, the story didn't read well. It was choppy, and it felt like it was all statements.

-Character Development: This was close to non-existent. You barely described to me how they look, let alone their personalities. They were mostly one dimensional.

-Speed: Was way too fast! You need to slow down so you can make some time for more plot development (which was also weak) or character development. When I r as this, it felt like my head was spinning after I read your story.

Anyways, the story was good, and with these sligt adjustments, you can make it even better!

Thanks,

Elijah