All Comments on 'Sara is Daddy's Little Girl'

This is looking like a dream story, mom/son will become a couple and father/daughter have become a couple. What an amazing and hot story. Please let it continue. hopefully both decide to move away with each others new partner.

I hope we'll see Mom Son and Daughter-in law do a threesome before it's over. Then the whole family can get together.

Well, I guess if Rappers can do it so can story writers. All the fucks and very little else made it very redundant and boring.

Sorry, no stars.

I suggest a dictionary and an Editor for your next story. Commas where there shouldn't be any.

There are thousands of descriptive words you can use to give fruit to the imagination and urgency to a sex scene. Synonyms!

She has to announce to him that Jake's their son? He doesn't know?

I couldn't even get past the first page. The grammar, punctuation and story exposition were atrocious. I'll never know how the sex scenes were because I will never get to them.

Enjoyable premise, but the repetitiveness of your phrasing is highly distracting and annoying. I cannot stress your need for a good editor strongly enough.

Truly, truly appalling "writing".

...and that's all I read!

I see by other comments that I made the right decision.

I wanted to add some constructive criticism here, but more than anything right now I just want to break your comma key.

that was well told Hank. Incest seems to get my attention. Fresh caught fish cooked on an open fire is very hard to beat. Thanks for your effort in the telling.

I gave up about half way through. It was a nice idea but the grammar was of a jr high school boy/girl with their first crush. Too bad. It was a good idea for a story. One star was all I could give it and that was so I'd remember that I'd read (part of) it and didn't try to read it again. Sorry.

Daddy's vocabulary is very " hillbillyish"

What in the world I need more what happened was the mom cheating ?????

The dialog during sex was juvenile so I rated 2 stars.