by Younglover1124
Not bad at all. 1 little critique tho. " the odor he was emitting was more FOUL than usual" fowl is a bird. Like a chicken. Looking forward to chap 02.
2 stars
DragonRider55
I love this type of story very much. Yes it’s true older men and some men in general don’t take care of their hygiene. However even if they were blackmailing her they would want to seduce her into giving in. Not stinking would further that immensely. Thus making it more believable. But if it gets you the writer off more that she succumbs to him while being unclean and stinking by all means continue. Just continue writing these types of stories.
This asshole must be a disgusting piece of work to not be able to keep a girlfriend. Too many girls out there craving big dick.