All Comments on 'Sarah's Secret'

The author is a dork and doesn't know the simplest common terms for this kind of story. Kept using 'come' not 'cum' when referring to things sexual such as 'semen/orgasm/etc.' which totally wreck stories. The author needs to go back to grade school for a refresher by the kids.

At least you were brave enough to publish a story with plot... I am not an editor but I appreciate a story.. You'll get better with practice and constructive feedback...

Only a "dick" would call you a dork for the simple sin of inexperience. Read other authors and KEEP WRITING. Your idea was fine. Yea. You could have enlarged on it some but that isn't a problem, just a choice.

The kinds of mistakes you are making are the ones easiest to correct. It is harder, much harder, to simply make yourself write and to give your characters some life and personality. That you did fine.

KEEP WRITING!

That is not meant to be a good thing.

Some dork, and I use the term advisedly, complained that the author used "come" rather than "cum"

"Cum" is the spelling nasty little boys use because they think it is more erotic. Authors in mainstream literature use "come" Whenever I see "cum" I conclude that the author is without resources and imagination; he thinks by using a spelling which suggests smut he will make the story more titillating. I'm glad this author resisted such a cheap trick.

As to the story it was too easy to see the twist coming. I'm not sure how it could be better disguised.

Finish the story & I'll rate it. Unfinished it rates a single star.

A beautiful story. Loved it

Most women have a rape or near rape fantasy lurking in the dark corners of their minds, in the ideal at least for some of us it's the idea of being helpless, not in control.

And we know, don't we, that the stranger had to have been invited there by her husband?

I found this a very erotic and sensual tale. I loved the ending and hope their might be a follow up tale where the mystery continues.

Excellent beginning, the twist at the end, sets up endless possibilities, who is the mystery lover, has her husband set her up, is this going to be the new normal? What we now need is part two and soon.

Great story! Just noticed that you’ve added another chapter after a long absence, what a lovely surprise that you’ve decided to write again. This is a well balanced story with plenty of details and suspense, you captured the essence of uncertainty of someone bound and blindfolded. Am off to read the new chapter.

Tess (UK)

Very nicely done!

R.