by woody_strokem
Dude, normally it takes me 3 or 4 good stories to cum...this one made it in one! Keep it up!
The long awaited return of W.S. does not disappoint! Loved it!
The characters and their relationship was very nicely developed and the build up had a nice slow pace to it.
I was distracted though by the jumps in time when I thought things were continuous and by the omissions and changes. Like they were hot after the airconditioned car and that it didn't say they were skinny dipping the first time out, but then referenced it later.
I don't mean to take away from a nice story, but these are the things that distracted me from the story line.
Please don't stop now. WWe need parts 2,3,&4. Very hot, very good story.
Rjay
i loved this. all you ever seem to get are the 1 page quick intro-fuck fuck- then its over. but wow its so much better in a actual storie. so many times i had to hold my self bak before i just went off. wheres #2 man cant wait
well i hv never read such a fantastic story ever in ma life. it was really great , a long but completely satisfying story. the best etory i hv ever read in ma life.
I like the way ur story was able to keep my attention. I was so worked up i had gotten a rise and began to plz myself as iI read. thank u for ur story
A bit disjointed really needs a bit of editing and rework
it seems we have another useless writer that can't finish a story no begining and no end some background would be nice and telling us what happened the rest of the month until the parents came home would be good. also it would be nice to know if the parents find out and if she gets pregnant and what happens when summer is over time to stop being lazy and finish a few stories
This story turned me on before it was even fully sexual. My thoughts still race with fantasy, even after my climax. Bravo.
First time I have ever come across a story on here where a character has my name (Sasha). Surprised I never found it before considering how old it is. Pretty good story. Of course it was a bit hard for me to get absorbed into the story when I kept seeing my name. But curiousity got the better of me and i read it all the way through. Personally I get a bit bummed when the story ends directly after the sex unless there is another chapter. 3 years later, guess you're not making one.
Liked the long build-up to the final event. Made them work for it, ease into it, and that made the tale more realistic.
do these writers think before posting? if the mirror is so fogged that he can barely tell the difference between the towel her skin nipples and bush then how can he see to brush his hair? one or the other not both either he can see his hair and her body clearly or he can't see well enough to comb his hair or see her. this needs a total rewrite and a good editor NOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
DBRS
After the long build up, the end was incomplete. There need to be a chapter 2.
you never finished this story or VERONICA please finish them soon . it seems almost criminal to leave stories unfinished
I loved the "innocent" build up. Makes the story more believable. It would be nice to see a new chapter added. The story seems incomplete.
"At 6'3", Brad was a good 4 inches taller than his sister" then when they stood back to back she barely reached his shoulder
unfinished, no background or charcter development, no end (as usual) to much unreakistic teasing with no one getting mad or hurt. time to delete and rewrite it PROPERLY with a PROPER BEGINNING and a PROPER END and PROPER REACTION TO TEASING.
I loved the whole story but my faborite part was how you went about ending the story! You really did a good job with this story!
Very entertaining...
But the "not good" faggot had to comment below too. Yeah dear author, as this looser demands, delete this story and re-write it properly, give it a proper beginning, a proper end and a proper reaction to teasing... NOT. Even though I've yet to figure out what "unreakistic teasing" means.
So, she never had those feelings before now suddenly she wants to exchange body fluids with him, only question is how will she let him down, the only reason she did it was sudden lust, nothing wrong with that but lust is not love.
Love the style, love the buildup and pace, and love the relationship development.
Sexual tension was hot as fuck, and I don't understand why there aren't tons of positive comments up already.
Honestly one of the best I've read on the site, thank you for the nice read
Bloody fantastic. What a great story, well told and flowed beautifully. Thank you.
Fucking great.............Reminds me a lot of growing up with my 4 year younger sister. We did everything except actually fuck and even though it was many years ago my dick still gets hard when I recall those times.
But in HS I used to pretend that my sweetheart was my sister. Mom suggested it because she wanted to dissuade me from doing anything sexual with her. But it just turned me on even more. Years later, after we were married, I told her about it. You see, we could actually pass for siblings. So, we'd take weekends and go to other towns to antique shop or to eat and call 'Brother' and 'Sis'. But we'd hold hands and kiss and generally make out like lovers. It was very hot, and the people around us were all either really scandalized or looked turned on themselves. We got so that we called each other Bro and Sissy during sex also. After all these years, I still kind of think of her as my sister. And having known each other since grade school, it kind of seems like we are. She asked me later if, on our wedding night, if I were actually fucking my sister I said "yes". But I don't actually have a blood sister.
..., but you lost me right at the start when brother and sister met each other. You describe it as if they had not seen each other for four consecutive years. Then you mention that she had returned at times, but none of them realised how they had grown (as if four years no see). If they were cousins and had not seen each other that long - fair enough, but brother and sister? Then when he asks her whether shes gonna stay for holiday and the question turns out a big shock for the sister. - Sorry, to say, but that pretty much ruined it for me right from the start. Keep on writing, I hope you draw joy from it, but please pay attention to details like that and whether the setting makes any sense, because some people actually pay attention to that.
With the previous comment plus with anonymous ( unfinished) I’ll say no more ⭐️⭐️