All Comments on 'Sassy Shelley Ch. 01'

Descriptive, perfectly paced, good characterizations, the only thing that keeps it from being a 100 are a few awkward phrases that took me out of the story for a second, otherwise prefect. Can't wait for chapter 2.

Agree with above comment...Look for the story to take some twists and turns over the next chapters. Good start!

Bullshit on the "phrases taking someone out of the story for a moment" That's bull!! This is a damned great story!! Please continue to write baby---you are really good!!! Makes me wish my step mother had been like you!!! I'd still be a t home!!!

Bullshit on the "phrases taking someone out of the story for a moment" That's bull!! This is a damned great story!! Please continue to write man---you are really good!!! Makes me wish my step mother had been like her!!! I'd still be at home!!!

You really know how to tell a story. I like you set up such an honest and loving relationship between Keith and Toni; if anything, it made the oral sex part even more enjoyable and believable. I can't wait to read what happens next.