All Comments on 'Saving Her Ch. 02'

I do really like this story. There are a couple of really picky things and yes they are picky little errors just so you watch for them when writing. He picked her up at noon and went shopping and yet you addressed the store personal as good evening, just a slight error. As they entered his building you said he wore a suit and tie but looked fine with no jacket. To me, a suit includes a jacket again a very slight error perhaps. Please keep the story coming but you are asking for a lot when they have just met. She may encounter some problems with the rules and not be being bratty. She did just escape an abusive relationship and this type of relationship makes her very vulnerable emotionally even if there is no intent on his part.

Thank you for pointing those things out. I do agree Gideon will have to learn how to deal with Lilah and her fragile state. Please stay tuned to see how they will both progress.

As far as the suit, yes typically it is a full ensemble but it is written that way to purposely let the reader know he was choosing to not wear the full outfit. The good evening to me is anything from noon and on, but I can see the confusion and will keep that in mind in the future.

Thank you for your feedback and support :).

Enjoying the story line and can't wait for more. Please keep it up.

Chapter 3 is now out hope u enjoy :)

Irony, I have one in my neighborhood too! I've never really gone in, they mostly serve drinks and snacks, but it's really pretty and you can have events there.

I love how Gideon is taking time with her and moving slowly. I am looking forward to the next chapter to see where the day in his world takes them.

Love your writing style. The setup was just exquisite!

The extra quotation marks around every single sentence are annoying and even confusing, a hindrance to reading. At times they make it feel as if the person talking was changing. As long as the same person keeps talking, it should be within the same quotation.