All Comments on 'Saving Lucian Ch. 01'

Very nice introductory story, Ms Smith! I look forward to more chapters.

If this is your first story you are heading in the right direction though slowly & steadily. Iam sure you are working on the next chapter, which is eagerly awaited.

Good luck !

Mr.Sam (kinkykingfisher@yahoo.com)

Good idea and some poetry trying to rise to the top, but you need to have someone confide in you and tell you just what is wrong. Start by not trying to write in first person....

Great start. I don't know where you are going with the story, but at least you spend some time vividly putting us in the character's world. Don't rush!