by KemMyst
Very hard to keep up with who is who and where everyone is.
So it's a little choppy on the storyline, there is no way for it to be a stand alone story
(sometimes helpful when attracting new readers), and it only ruffly connects to the other stories in the series, but I like where you are going with this. Please keep writing, it always gets
better.
It does have potential but it wanders so much it was hard to follow. Hopefully it will settle out as the story continues.