All Comments on 'Scared Sara Ch. 02'

i like the way this is going please send the next part as soon as possible. "jakk"

enthralling story, very well written, can hardly wait for chapter 3

This is such a sweet story but I feel so bad for Lucien. He's the one that always have to give. Maybe something should happen to the couple so that Sara would have to be the one to give in the relationship?

However, the switching of 'persons' is very distracting, I don't think it is having the effect you were hoping for it to have? Changing from 2nd person to third person and back again is a bit jarring and stops the flow of this wonderful tale you are writing. I really mean that, it is a wonderful tale, except for that one small flaw.