All Comments on 'School Girl Blackmail Ch. 01'
by BradGarrettStories
- 27 Comments
BradGarrettStoriesabout 11 years agoAuthorThe second chapter has been approved and will post tomorrow
BradGarrettStoriesabout 11 years agoAuthor.....even if the other person ends up liking it. The premise was blackmail, but that doesn't mean it has to be something the other person doesn't want.
Anonymousabout 11 years agoA great story. I hope it ends with her pregnant with the man's child.
Anonymousabout 11 years agoBut that doesn't make this non-con or even reluctance. Seriously, I realize the whole concept he pretends he's running on is "teaching her the consequences of her actions", but he's really teaching her "fuck your way out of trouble" and I doubt he's really stupid enough to delude himself into believing otherwise.
That's the point - just because it's blackmail doesn't make it non-con. If I use a tape of someone snorting cocaine to blackmail them into accepting one million dollars, it sure isn't going to be non-con or reluctance when they accept it, anymore than it's non-con or reluctance when the little slut already had a crush on him and was perfectly willing to do what he was "blackmailing" her into doing.
If you're going to run multi parts, put them in their proper category. That would be erotic couplings, or if he decides to break his "word" and have her "submit to him" so he can be Mr. Dominant, BDSM.
BradGarrettStoriesabout 11 years agoAuthorIts funny that you bring up the category because when I submitted the story. (both chapters were submitted the same day), I chose Erotic Couplings as my category for both stories. When they were approved, the category had changed to Non-Consent / Reluctance. Please understand when reading the story and voting that I DID NOT SELECT THIS STORY TO BE IN NON-CONSENT / RELUCTANCE, the editors of Literotica did.
it's still a blackmail story, but I completely agree that the category is wrong.
BradGarrettStoriesabout 11 years agoAuthorWell, I'm not an English teacher. Haha, its just a fantasy, but good catch and I'll use it properly in the future if it comes up. Hope that one little misused word didn't spoil the story for you.....
Anonymousabout 11 years ago....what ANYONE says or if you use "thru" instead of "through" or what freakin' category it is in! I LOVED it. Mmmm... made me hot and wet! Now, off to read Chapter 2! XO
69red83about 11 years agoI had a thing for my English teacher, but sadly nothing ever came of it, but I have to say this was well thought out and it had my pussy dripping wet, cannot wait to read the second chapter.
Although you missed a few grammar items, oh well it did not deviate from the story, I cannot stand when people have to critique the writer when the mistakes are simple and OMG spelled right. You are an amazing writer, and I was brought into your story wishing it was me..
Thank you so much,
GingerVyeabout 11 years agoI love how she still calls him Mr. Clements. It's great to see they're both getting on knowing that what they're doing is wrong.
Anonymousalmost 10 years agoThe school girl thing tends to be hot because they are young, and innocent. You had your female character acting like a forty year old bar whore. It totally killed it. The dialogue was extremely cheesie.
Ib_Saysover 5 years agoLike the premise, but it's marred a bit by sloppy editing.
This story really needs some more proofreading.
Anonymousabout 5 years agoA good setup and in particular I liked how he bought the outfit and toys, giving us clues as to what would happen. Like others said it could use more editing, and btw I wouldn't even bother saying that for most of the badly written stories I see. Yours is worth finishing... ooh I see Ch 02 is up. Off I go.
Anonymousabout 3 years agoRather than being harsh/mean to her, Mr. Clements could have given Brianna a loving sexuual "lesson" (even if pretending to punish her). So I was already apprehensive/dubious about this story. But when he peed on her face -- even worse, in her mouth -- I quit reading (on her pussy probably would have been OK).
And rated it low.
Paul in Oklahoma
Anonymous9 months agoThe story was mostly good, I'm not a fan of pissing in someone's mouth or ass fucking someone, it's your thing so I more than likely won;t be back.
