All Comments on 'Second Circle'

I like your terminology, but there's nothing really that drew you in, or made you care about the character. You didn't take it to an emotional level so when all of the hell born things began it was a little... boring. You want to make people latch onto your main characters... feel for them. In order to do that your focus has to be on them... I didn't get that from this piece. Again... nice terminology... but you didn't use it to make people feel anything real.