All Comments on 'Second Time Around 01'

Wait for more story to repost. We will not be able to follow the flow if you post just a few paragraphs at a time. I won't vote now.

... especially for a first submission to Literotica. It suggests a fine talent but was, sadly, too short to be able to confirm that suggestion. I see you have attached a number of story tags, so I imagine you will be bringing them to us in due course.

Very short pieces, such as this one, have a rather unsatisfying 'feel' to them and the reader can feel a little let down; I realise you wanted to get your story 'out there', but it really needed to be longer and have more to say.

That said, it was an enjoyable read and a good start - four stars and thank you for sharing.