All Comments on 'Second Time On Bi Side'

Quotation marks are a good thing. It's very difficult to tell when you're narrating the story and when someone is speaking.

You must have a fucking big fridge.

The story has good potential but you really need to slow the progression of the story, it feels very rushed. You should also think about running spell checker, and proof reading to find errors. Horny is spelled with a y not an e and anus is with a u not an I. And if you advertise index you should write some in to the story.

Figure out how to write in English

and you could use an editor - but i like the story idea, and i liked the story despite some mistakes - and the sex scene was short -but sexy!!

It Hed been about two months Science ?? 🙈 ( since ) you had a good Fuck, Then you got BEAR 🐻 ( Beer ) out of the fridge , I had to give up on your Story I just couldn't stop laughing