All Comments on 'Secret Loss of Innocence'

Your story was very imaginative. I would like to encourage you to write more and to use one of the volunteers to edit your writing. I will make one suggestion for you. 90% of your "hads" were not necessary. When they precede a vowel, just drop them and use the past tense. A few other minor tense errors also made it difficult to really enjoy the story while my mind made the grammatical corrections. Don't give up! You have a great imagination and fair grasp of English and will improve as you read and write more!