by VM218
I am not a fan of the golden shower,. Hope it is not too much.
Looking forward to another chapter with Anya and Valerie getting together.
I get as sense this story will build nicely and erotically. The sex so far has been cursory and matter-of-fact, hence the no-H rating but I'm sure given the assured writing it will grow. I'm quite new to this fetish, so splashing around a bit trying to connect with the genre. However, it's warming up for me.
i like the basic tale - but the sex, the story so far - is pretty mechanical. i noticed the ratings for the later chapters get better - so i'm going to stay with it. it looks as though this is your first story on this site - so good for a beginner!
thanks
Your story would be good minus the pissing, part. Seriously! Because of that, I had to give it one star.
Not into peeing it the rest was good.
Can’t wait for the next chapter
Great start. Guess the score is because of the pissing. I'm not into it in my persinal life, but I don't mind reading about it; it kinda spices things up, which is nice when all these stories start reading the same. 5/5
This is well written and very erotic, I’m looking forward to reading the next chapter.